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December 10, 2025

My Thoughts on 5 Random Previous Posts II

My Increasing Weight’s Reminding Me I Have Yet Another Thing to Put on My End-of-Year Agenda from October 30, 2023

Okay, this post is kinda all over the place. It’s just my notes after reading the post I’m writing about. I still have a crick in my neck. It was getting so much better then I re-irritated it, so I really need to watch my range of motion. But I still wanted to write and analyze. Here goes…

2nd sentence in the first paragraph the word “it” when I say, “ it’s harder to come off as you get older,” may be a little ambiguous. Like perhaps I could have written “the weight is harder to come off when you get older.”

The same when I say, “once I eat regular again,” I could have said something like, “as soon as I return to eating a normal diet.” Or for more clarity I could have said something like, “as soon as I abandon the calorie deficit diet.” I guess how I have it works, but I think one of these works better. 

3rd paragraph in the sentence: But this has been a forever struggle for me, and ever since I breach the 200s, I haven’t been able to get back out, except for one time over 20 years ago when I was a senior in college.

I put breached instead of “breach the 200s.

In the 4th paragraph I didn’t capitalize the word “Ninja” when I think I should have since it’s the proper name of the blender I was referencing.

Things I noticed about myself

I think I was a little to hard on myself. I sensed some disappointment that I gained the weight. I think I made it out to be a bigger deal than it actually is. So I gained weight while on vacation, big deal, I can lose it. That’s the approach I should be taking in those situations rather than bemoaning what happens naturally in those situations.

But I like the fact that I was trying. Though I ended up gaining even more weight and kept that weight on until recently when I lost about 20 pounds. This was right after I was fired, so now I can give myself grace.

I have long sentences.

I use words like “and” and “but” a lot to start sentences.

I like my voice. I’m not saying much, but I like how I’m saying it. Though I’m not sure I can really recognize my voice yet, or at least I don’t think I can describe it.

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Introducing My Writing Practice!

You know, writing rarely comes easy for me. Most of the time I mull over it forever, then edit it and edit it,  only for it to still be filled with errors, or just not be quite right.

Part of the problem is I’m reaching for that old unattainable perfection. The other part is I need to read and write more.

So this is me, writing more.

In this series, I’m giving myself two hours to write about a topic of my choice nonstop, and 30 minutes to edit it before I post it here, just as it is.  The great sentences and the incoherent ones with spelling and grammatical errors too.  I’m just going to write and see what it will be.

I’ll be posting these writing practices once a week. I’m not sure which day, and maybe no particular day, just one time a week, with no end date as of now.

I can be so insecure about my writing, so I think this will be helpful.

Here’s to writing and getting better at it!

Thanks for reading!

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Mood…

There is a river whose streams make glad the city of God, the holy place where the Most High dwells. — Psalm 46:4

Lord, let me be that river.

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