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December 10, 2025

My Thoughts on 5 Random Previous Posts II

My Increasing Weight’s Reminding Me I Have Yet Another Thing to Put on My End-of-Year Agenda from October 30, 2023

Okay, this post is kinda all over the place. It’s just my notes after reading the post I’m writing about. I still have a crick in my neck. It was getting so much better then I re-irritated it, so I really need to watch my range of motion. But I still wanted to write and analyze. Here goes…

2nd sentence in the first paragraph the word “it” when I say, “ it’s harder to come off as you get older,” may be a little ambiguous. Like perhaps I could have written “the weight is harder to come off when you get older.”

The same when I say, “once I eat regular again,” I could have said something like, “as soon as I return to eating a normal diet.” Or for more clarity I could have said something like, “as soon as I abandon the calorie deficit diet.” I guess how I have it works, but I think one of these works better. 

3rd paragraph in the sentence: But this has been a forever struggle for me, and ever since I breach the 200s, I haven’t been able to get back out, except for one time over 20 years ago when I was a senior in college.

I put breached instead of “breach the 200s.

In the 4th paragraph I didn’t capitalize the word “Ninja” when I think I should have since it’s the proper name of the blender I was referencing.

Things I noticed about myself

I think I was a little to hard on myself. I sensed some disappointment that I gained the weight. I think I made it out to be a bigger deal than it actually is. So I gained weight while on vacation, big deal, I can lose it. That’s the approach I should be taking in those situations rather than bemoaning what happens naturally in those situations.

But I like the fact that I was trying. Though I ended up gaining even more weight and kept that weight on until recently when I lost about 20 pounds. This was right after I was fired, so now I can give myself grace.

I have long sentences.

I use words like “and” and “but” a lot to start sentences.

I like my voice. I’m not saying much, but I like how I’m saying it. Though I’m not sure I can really recognize my voice yet, or at least I don’t think I can describe it.

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